Tuesday, 27 November 2012

Writing to describe

In Ignite@Midnight we are learning to write to describe. We want our audience to get a picture in their head of the event we are describing.

Check out the piece of writing we wrote together as a class about Ngaire's niece swimming at the beach. Tell us what you think.

My little niece, Alexis, and I went to the sandy, Auckland beach on the weekend. Alexis loves the feel of the soft, golden sand between her toes and fingers. 

As she ran down towards the water you could hear her delightful giggles from the anticipation of entering the water. Wavy water went everywhere as Alexis splashed about. After awhile she put her face right down and drank the salty water. Yuk! She didn’t mind though. 

After a long time of swimming, Alexis was shivering from the cold and she waddled off out of the sea to get dry and warm again.

1 comment:

  1. What wonderful descriptive writing! I can hear the waves and feel the sand as i read it.